That was so fun when we play bayblades. "I've once been a champion."
"Oh really?" They say, "Where are your old ones?" They ask.
I pull them out of my pocket.
"Wow"
Neil and Andre say with amazement.
"Told you!" I said.
Then the bell went off.
By Chase
What do you think of my writing?
What do you think I could improve on?
I chose this piece of writing Chase because it is a great example of you using speech in your independent writing. I wonder what everyone else thinks though?
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ReplyDeletewow awesome but short dose not matter though its still a greatpiece of writing
ReplyDeleteSometimes pieces are short, because they are just one moment in time Emma.
ReplyDeletewhat a awesome peace of writing chase
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